For my revision, I revised a history paper that I wrote and the professor specifically pointed out where I used passive voice and shouldn't have. I think I might have some AAWWUUBIS clauses in there, but I'm not sure. :)
For many years before the first national parks were created, the idea of establishing national parks had been played around with and debated about. The idea began to become a reality in the mid-1800s. Something that was a setback for national parks was the fact that Indians lived on the lands that were being looked at to create the parks. Americans in the eastern United States and Indians had many differing viewpoints on what the lands should be used for. Americans wanted national parks and Indians called the lands their home. According to Spence, Americans even had viewpoints that weren’t similar amongst each other. Some people, such as George Catlin, wanted to preserve the wilderness, but his vision “included the presence of Indians” (Spence 10). Still others, according the Spence, saw that preserving the wilderness went “hand in hand with native dispossession” (3).
Several years before the first national parks were created, many Americans had tossed around and debated the idea of actually creating national parks and preserving wilderness. In the mid-1800s the idea began to become a reality. A setback for the national parks proved to be the Indians who resided on the lands. The lands that were being looked at to create parks happened to be the same lands that many North American Indian tribes called home. Controversy was created with Americans in the eastern United States and Indians having differing viewpoints on how the lands should be used. Many Americans wanted national parks, but that would mean the Indians would have to relocate. According to Spence, differing viewpoints were even found amongst the Americans advocating for national parks and the preservation of wilderness. Some people, such as George Catlin, wanted to preserve the wilderness, but his vision “included the presence of Indians” (Spence 10). Still others, according to Spence, saw that preserving the wilderness went “hand in hand with native dispossession” (3).
